altough it's not really my cup of tea musicwise I still think you did a good job on this one, especially for a first track 
 
I'd add a nice sinewave underneath your current "bass"line, to add some sub to it. 
Would be cool to if your kick & snare were a bit more upfront in the mix, gives the track a bit more rhythm & punch.
Other than that, solid track, keep it up!