WORKS-IN-PROGRESS for NOVEMBER, 2010

[jak-a-tron]

Appreciate your feedback amphibian as this is the only real peace of feedback iv got on this. I just wish more people would give feedback instead of just posting their tunes up and expecting feedback. Even them guys get more feedback than me.

[kojent]

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[kojent]

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[amphibian]

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don't expect any feedback.

[djtelevision]

I apologize for not giving any feedback, It's 5:45 where I am and I just spent the last 3 or 4 hours putting this together:
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I promise I will give feedback for the tracks of others when I wake up from the coma I am rushing headlong into right now.
(don't laugh at my track stuffs, I know the drums are weaker than a geriatric prostate)

and oh yeah, I'm no longer television, it's ender now

[Krave]

djtelevision - you have potential with those synths, use more of a variation and a bass line would help too, find some drum samples and work from there.

jak-a-tron - like those wobbles, try making a banger tune with those instead of a slower one, shit would be sick.

amphibian - song was sick, i think if there was more random bleeps with some reverb it would add more character to the tune, but it sounds unreal great track.

tripwire22 - i'm pretty sure your timings off, through out the song, add some bass to that it it should sound better.

Here's my WIP

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From Canada with love

[tripwire22]

ill feedback everyone in bit but to dude above me there is def some sub bass thats really low so u might not be able to hear it. either way im just messing around so i might just scrap the beat

[rubiconguava]

@jak-a-tron - feel like the snare lacks anythin crisp in it, bit drenched in verb, cud maybe be a tad more punchy... also the high freq whistle noises that are goin al the way thru cud do with bein brought back in the mix sometimes, just so theyre not so incessant, gd noises but in that freq range that can get a bit tiresome. Its a wicked tune, love the sinister melody, the wobbles are spot on, understated, lurking monster! look forward to hearin the finished version

[apastrat]

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Not sure about the synths.

[superginger]

#Krave
nice drums and percs! not keen on that synth though! :/ the sample is fine and the drop is cool! but it sounds like it's playing on a whole different key than the intro? this is not a must... but I really think it sounds 10 times better if you play the bassline on the same key as the intro is played in. or the first introsynth key, if you udnerstand! well structed song though...


#djtelevision
sorry but that intro just doesnt work for me... put a solid pad udnerneath! and maybe som hihats. the arpeggio which kicks in later is pretty cool, but gets a bit outplayed. that synth which is played during the whole song gets very annoytinfg after a little while. the intro is way to long. the drop melody is just wrong too... up and down like that? no it jsut doesnt work. sorry if I seem rude but Im just trying to help! gl with ur further productions.

#finji
nice intro! a bit long for my taste.. sweet as drop! cool bassline edits. epic melody! nice hihatwork too I donät like that snare too much though! but big ups man...

reposting my WIP v2 again and I hope more than 1 will drop feedback on this one now <.<
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[Steeple]

@ superginger - the biggie sample is sick ... like the drop but not a big fan off all this crazy wobble malarkey ... good work though mate

@ apastrat - i like that alot mate ... boppin my head away to the beat here zoning out ... finish this off!

@ rubiconguava - the intro is wiked feeling it me! and when it changes up its sick ... minimal 2 the max!

@ tripwire - again the intro is sick ... the b-line on this sick not feelin the clicky snare goin on, but thats just me! good work again though mate

well well this is something i have started on 2day plan 2 finish this off during the week! its just the simple lay out so far need 2 get alot more intricate and change up sounds but just let me know what you lot think please!
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[Vakath]

@krave that yoie sound is cool but sounds a little too distorted and the sample at the end sounds like its taken straight from a datsik track but the intros sweet man seriously good.

@superginger love it man really cool that last sections so massive!

@apastrat cool drums mate i just love to skank to filth but this is nice for chilled listening

heres my WIP only got a laptop and a mono bass guitar amp atm so dno how well its gona transfer to other systems

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[Mortal]

@krave: im loving that intro and those drums, they have a nice skippy feel...not as keen on the bitcrushing though, feels a little overdone to me

@Superginger: real heavy kick, feels good. and youve worked those lyrics in very nicely, keep that up. as for after the drop, im digging the sounds they're really hevay but some of it sounds a little out of time and too manic. good work though

@steeple: im really liking the sounds and sence of space in your track, its quite deep...however i think the two things killing this space are the snares, and that humming in the background. the snare could be a little cleaner to go with the other percussion and leave that sense of space. and the humming could do with some variation, it kinda just feels a bit flat to me. other than that, nice work

@vakath: interesting intro with the reversed vocals, adds a nice touch. i would however try and remove that ringing thats coming from the bitcrushing, just a simple bit of EQing should get rid of most of it so its not so noticable.

and heerres mine

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still very much a work in progress, but im interested in some constructive criticism

[jak-a-tron]

@jak-a-tron - feel like the snare lacks anythin crisp in it, bit drenched in verb, cud maybe be a tad more punchy... also the high freq whistle noises that are goin al the way thru cud do with bein brought back in the mix sometimes, just so theyre not so incessant, gd noises but in that freq range that can get a bit tiresome. Its a wicked tune, love the sinister melody, the wobbles are spot on, understated, lurking monster! look forward to hearin the finished version

Thanks very much for your feedback mate. Very helpful indeed i will get back to work on this and post back with improved version.
I'm glad you like it

[LiquidAudioPhenomena]

@ jak-a-tron
Nice tune man! I really like the intro; very ominous. I feel like if you added more movement and shuffle on the hats on the second drop it'd make that much of a bigger impact and a badass addition to boot.

@ superginger
Hell yeah! Big fan of how you used the sample, and the bass is really working! Did you sample a distorted guitar? One of the basses really sounds like a heavily distorted axe. Keep up the good work!

@ Vakath
Very tight; and well polished. Reversed vocal sample really added an interesting touch. Love the contrast of the intro and the drop. I can't wait to hear the finished product!

Here's one I'm working on. I'm having a real difficult time mastering it; as I'm pretty new to dub production. It's really experimental. Feel free to comment and critique, thanks!

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[djtelevision]

LiquidAudioPhenomena-I definitely like your chugga chugga bass sounds, and the general feel of the track is happy, which is always a upside for me. I enjoyed it thoroughly!

Krave-around 1:30 and on is so decent, I would love the track to continue! your bitcrushing is of a fine, fine calibur.

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I pretty much just threw together a bunch of loops that were made to go really well together in a really sloppy order, but I enjoy the sounds a lot.

[hutyluty]

@djtelevision- well it's different, I'll give you that. You've got some really good ideas in there, the drums are nice at the start, but kind of get drowned out by the bass when it comes in. It builds really well afterwards, i really like the falling scale synth over the top and the snare sounds really nice. Drop at 2:25 is a bit much though, kind of just sounds like a load of noise, for some reason it gives me an image of a snake slithering around, god knows why. Anyway, nicetune up til 2:25, maybe after that you wan't to look at continuing on with the more midrangery sound over the top of that basslline, tunred down and with a low pass filter stopping it overriding everything .

@liquid audio phenomena- Really nice intro, i love the little synth. Then when it drops, very nice, especially liking the way everything sits so balanced in the mix and interacts so well with the drums. Your sub bass however is kind of quiet, you want to be bringing it forward, it'll make the drop punch harder on decent speakers and add to that bit where its just drums and sub. Really nice tune though mate

@Mortal- nice spooky introduction, like the hats on the beat that comes in and the bloopy bassline afterwards as well as the subby melody underneath. All sounds a bit empty though, much better at 3:00 when that pad comes in, fills out the gaps nicely, you might want to have some delay, or reverb on the bloops at the start or maybe record the track over some background noise you record or something to make it feel less empty, also i feel you could turn the sub up. Nice tune

This is mine, apologies for it being so long, feel free to skip through

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[tripwire22]

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[tripwire22]

djtelevision - you have potential with those synths, use more of a variation and a bass line would help too, find some drum samples and work from there.

jak-a-tron - like those wobbles, try making a banger tune with those instead of a slower one, shit would be sick.

amphibian - song was sick, i think if there was more random bleeps with some reverb it would add more character to the tune, but it sounds unreal great track.

tripwire22 - i'm pretty sure your timings off, through out the song, add some bass to that it it should sound better.

Here's my WIP

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From Canada with love

i dunno if i like the intro much seems a bit weird but loved it when it dropped bass was good mate

@tele/ender that 1st bass u have sounds a bit cheap maybe try to process it better 2nd bass at the other end of the track sounds much better

@huty song is a bit long and weird but the 2nd half of it sounds good with all the songs going on

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i have a new song done just today i think came out real well

[Voodeedoo]

@LiquidAudioPhenomena
Very nice, some parts feel a bit empty but overall you're in a good direction.

@djtelevision
think the droney bass kind of drowns out the rest of the song :/ cool sounds though!

@jak-a-tron
the drums might need more in-your-faceness/livliness i think. like the wobbles :D

this is a house tune i attempted to make in logic studio. i don't really know which way to arrange it/which melody to go with, so itll probably remain unfinished for awhile until something hits me. feedback appreciated!
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