comparison for a record lable constructive criticism please!

[prohjecktom]

hey guys, i recently got in contact with "Dirt Lies Audio" record lable and the said that they liked one of my songs, but i had to add more vairation in the bassline to keep audiences interested, i was just wondering if you could listen to the before and after and tell me your thoughts?

cheers!

(BEFORE THE CHANGES):
Soundcloud

(AFTER THE CHANGES):
Soundcloud

*edit, sorry guys made a change to it so i had to change the url

[Elartsen]

soundng phat but i dont think its what they mean. to be honest i dont hear much difference. i can hear it changing more but i think they mean it varying in the loop (man this is hard to describe) like three to four different sounds instead of one sound variating. does that make sense? keep it up! sounds sick so far

[prohjecktom]

well, i've just been talking to the lable owner, sounds like he likes it, will know tomorrow as he's listening on his laptop instead of studio speakers, but so far so good

[IOMac]

LIstened to the before as after wouldn't load. Good theme and a good track, have you had it mastered yet?

[vyvyan]

hi!

Can(t listen to the redone track. The first one is great though, even if i'm not generally too much into drumstep, i really like this one!
It is long between 1:36 and 2:21, though not boring. What i'd do, is put a break at 1:59: if you add and develop the part at the end (from 2:22), it'd give a perfect break, and then after the break again something close to the 0:28 to 1:13 part, and then outro, and the rocks!

Well, that's just an idea...

Keep the good work, and good luck for the label thingy!

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[prohjecktom]

hi!

Can(t listen to the redone track. The first one is great though, even if i'm not generally too much into drumstep, i really like this one!
It is long between 1:36 and 2:21, though not boring. What i'd do, is put a break at 1:59: if you add and develop the part at the end (from 2:22), it'd give a perfect break, and then after the break again something close to the 0:28 to 1:13 part, and then outro, and the rocks!

Well, that's just an idea...

Keep the good work, and good luck for the label thingy!

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changed the URL so that it works

ty for ur feedback :D:D:D:D

[vyvyan]

Nice second trial, but I keep my comments that I made before. The breaks-step part, was kinda good, you should keep it somewhere, maybe after the break i talked to you about! all what you've made in drumstep, then a break, then a drumstep-breaks-step part, then the outro. That'd give a 4, 4:30 minutes track, that'd be ok!

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