WIP Thread - GIVE FEEDBACK TO OTHERS BEFORE POSTING!!!

[mthrfnk]

@ehbrums1: First off how do you pronounce phaeo?

Fay-oh

Ah ok, reminds me of Phaeleh.

Side note: Update my WIP with a slightly better one.

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[jetpack]

@Praxisaxis: Dug "The Retrofit" a lot. I kept wanting to hear a big snare on some downbeats, but I liked the track. Percussion on "Electro-Mechanical" was spot on.

@ehbrums1: Mix sounds on. 1:04 seems tough to fit another sound there. It's full sounding, for the minimal feel, but the drums got repetitive for me.

@Fbac: Intro is a bit long for my liking, but the intro made me feel as if the drop would be half time. I like the tempo, but half time drums might evoke a different vibe. If you keep this tempo, try a more exciting build up to get the audience ready for the drop.

New melodic tune I'm building. Basic structure, as I'm looking for mix/overall sound feedback mainly. Cheers.

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[Praxisaxis]

Jetpack thanks for listening. I'll go back and re-evaluate that snare - good advice.

[Praxisaxis]

@Praxisaxis: Some neat sound design and ambiences you have going on. The mixing sounds okay and the basses sound great (would be interested in what synth/fx you used for them). I'd like to hear all these tracks in full man, stuff is sounding ace! Overall the production value sounds awesome and liek I said the mixing sounds okay too. Great job on the EP, hit me up when it's done

Thank you, much appreciated. It's good to get advice here while I'm still tuning the finer details. I'll put out the word when it's done.

[yungkay]

EHBRUMS- really diggin that ambient tune...for for that1:04 mark, maybe some kind of deep reesey kind of grrowl will fit in nicely

FBAC: I like the song but idk about those lasers haa

lightshapers: sick ass melody yo but some of the basses sound like they are fading away idk it may be just me

well since no one really liked my other track i decided to make a drumstep track..feedback would be nice..mixdown isnt so great

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[Fbac]

@mthrfuk : (listening to it again, so here are my thoughts on the second listen,, i may make comments on things you havent changed lol so bear with me) not sure how i feel about those machine gun kick drums at the 1:03 mark. . Think the vocals you have in the intro are better,, that you cant quite make out the words straight away. .. The drop at sounds really clean @1:55 . really liking this track . Its all sounding good, just not sure how i feel about the machine gun kick your using. (wonder if it was in the other version you posted?) . Endings sounding alot better tho!

@jetpack: Im on a pair of creative speakers at the moment away from home, so mixdown advice i cant really give. overall sound, its nice. hats sounded abit harsch in the breakdown. Got some nice trance style melodies to it. Nice sounds quite chilled, quite nice. My style of music. All i could proberly add would be maybe a mid-range layer on that sine-bass would be interesting? but i dunno if that would ruin the track.

@yungkay: The lead/bass line seems to be abit too continuouse/relentless for my liking,, some breathing space would be good i think. Its not to my liking but at least that lead sound isnt an annoying highpitched one. nice big kick but the snare in coparrision sounds more like a clap (this may be what your going for) rather then a beefy snare. up to 0:10 instead of playing the beeps and the bass/lead at the same time, you could do some call and response type stuff here and maybe continue that thru out the track. Maybe some more modulations on that leadline (pitch bends at the end of a bar before a clap/snare for instance)

@feedback: So it seems the lazers should go. Which is what i was thinking before... mainly as when it was played in a crowded room i would think after the second drop it was a bit "Cringy" , so the old saying of you know best seems to apply here, but good to get other peoples take on it.

any new feedback on the track posted on Page 2 of this WIP thread (Bimbo remix) would be appreciated.

[mthrfnk]

This threads not as busy as usual heh, so I can only give feedback to 2 people:
@jetpack: Intro is nice and well paced, nicely mixed too - the melodies bubble along nicely with the pads and bass. I like how you break for the build, vocal at the drop is nice. Not too sure on the main mid synth at the drop - it could use more beef in the midrange, at the moment it sounds quite weak and filtered out. Aside from that the background ambience and sub is nice. Overall the mix sounds good, perhaps a tad bass heavy but not too much.

@yungkay: Nice drums, not too sure about the main midrange synth though, it gets a bit irritating after a while. You definitely need more bass, strip down the high end on that midrange and add a dedicated sub bass layer. Also varying the patterns will definitely help.

Some new stuff I started working on:
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[antman]

Mthrfnk: Really like your intro, nice and peaceful and very well put together. I also like your drop, however I would like to hear a bit more low end from your basslines that you have in there. The transition after the drop is great! Fits extremely well with your drop. Id also like to hear a bit more of the snare.

Fbac: Good track. Its not my style but it sounds very well produced. Its mixed pretty well, although its a little low but like you said its far from complete. Nothing that really sticks out to me as being bad.

Yungkay: Ahh now this is more my style haha, really good beat, nasty as fuck. All it needs is a bit more variation.

Ehbrums: Nice old school vibes here. As for the 1:04 mark, I would throw some sort of loud whitenoisey snap or clap with some delay. Sounding good so far!

Heres a short clip. Ive been trying to get a sort of p0gman / Lifecycle feel. Idk, to me it feels bland. Please advise if its shit altogether or if it needs something.

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[SaveMidnight]

Antman- this clip has a lot of potential. Not a whole lot there to judge, but it seems like the whole mix could do with some fattening up. Also that little sound that seems to pop up around the end of every second bar could come up a little in the mix. The drums sound nice now, but if youre going to bring more to the mix they'll need a little more meat on them, good job though the rhythm is really tight and the sound design is good too. Needs more synths, or maybe some layering. Something in the higher register wouldn't hurt either.

mthrfnk-love that guitar sound (both of them). This sounds like the end of a movie. Walk off into the sunset type stuff.
Good flow throughout. That drop is unexpected and really cool. the vocals might be a little overdone, maybe don't repeat them.
also, you might want to bring up that snare just a bit just so it hits almost as hard as the kick.
***ALSO, notice how all of a sudden the amount of posts goes down when people see that they have to listen to other people's stuff before posting.

yungkay- sucker for drumstep. Feeling this, has a Figure vibe to it. It's a little monotone however.
Also the kick needs to hit harder. I see this is a WIP but it needs a lot more to fill out the frequency range. Good start though.

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[skerrick]

LOVING the tunes guys.

[skerrick]

@Cryonic Dreams: Man, blown away. im developing a huge intetrest for minimal/deep dubz. you hit the nail on the head. such eerie pads and sick cutting snares/rims. really dig this.
@awfawfawffasfasaw: man, pretty evident you made this on looping software or something, quite a cool loop but ive made TONS of those on my fl studio app and imaschine for ipad. theyre fun and easy but man, you need to add it into a DAW and record some cool shizz over the top. i reckon this would be a sick club tune, dont really know why you posted it on dsf..
@Triphosphate BF: man, sick choons, bit broey for my liking, im seeming to dig the deeper more subtle bass these days.. but i really dig it mang. youre doing a good job with the dubz. youre chiptune scary monsters mix is a larf haha! also 'bach on glue' is off da chain


here are some deep tunes ive been working on, feedback would be much appreciated, seems people just listen these days, comments are few and far between. need to know whats good and whats not so i can refine my style

http://soundcloud.com/skerrick/raw-fourfour

http://soundcloud.com/skerrick/over-the-rainbow

http://soundcloud.com/skerrick/subconscious32bit

http://soundcloud.com/skerrick/daydreaming

^ if anyone can lurk one or all of these and lemme know what you think id be INCREDIBLY appreciative. thanks guys, happy producing.

[Fbac]

On a macbook pro today. So cant hear sub and comments about mix need to be taken with lots of pinchs of salt.. Referance tracks (pOgman - Rickshaw / Biometrix - shivas revenge)

@mthrfnk: Really like your intro, listend to it quite a few times.... it does remind me of another song tho? is this a sample?? Or maybe ive just listend to your track alot now haha. The composition of the intro is really good. Samples are cool, basslines dope,, hopefully you upload a finished wip for me to listen to on my system back home. I did think the breakdown came abit suddenly,, maybe some kind of delayed reverbed effect on the bass/lead to carry it into the breakdown as it faded away? , cool samples, where are they from? Interesting there is no snare. well done. I shall now follow you on Sc.

@antman: Had a listen to this p0gman, its not my style of music. I had to really turn up this laptop for for the intro and then backdown at the drop. Liking that growly bass in your intro. Think you have really nailed that lead/bass sound,, got some nice reverb on it without it sounding muddy. not sure how i feel about the change at 0:47 tho. For me the groove is lost, but this may be typical of this style. Your intro hats seemed abit bland to me..maybe some kind of processing on them? (however i seem to be saying this alot so maybe its just me) Quite a clean mix on this laptop, the clap/snare sounded a tad weak tho and didnt quite punch thru. well done.

@housten weather: Not overly keen on the intro sweeping sound, and the kick/clack sounds abit prominent altho my first thought was well processed. The vocals give a nice feel to the track. Not too keen on the beep synth line in the intro ,sounds abit dry... alhto when you add that delay/reverb effect it sounds quite nice. For me the drums are too loud (altho as im on a macbook for the first time i dont really know what theses speakers sound like). Liked the tabla part. For me the track didnt really go anywhere and come the drop i was expecting more and not overly keen on this song.. The vocals evoke a good emotion and maybe there is a nice sub on this that i cant hear which keeps the listener interested.

@skerrick: You should know what is good and what is not, listening to random people on the internet could be detrimental to your music. haha.. If its deep then im going to be missing out on alot of stuff on laptop speakers.
:::raw:fourfour:: Kind of interesting beat at the beginning, not too keen on the 0:31 kick roll,, seems to not fit the groove. Not too keen on the drone sounds abit wishy washy (may be the laptop speakers) , do like the twinkly piano pieces. At the dubstep part it feels quite slow (i realise its 110bpm) The snare sounds a bit sharp and could properly do with some reverb to fill out the space (you may be going for a non-reverb snare tho as a reverbed snare is quite a cliche) Not too keen on the bass, think it could do with some interesting movement in it. (altho it may have a really nice low end im missing) . Dont really think the bass meshs with the beats well. got some nice ghosty pads in the background tho. and come 3:07 you have built up some nice ambiance. To me that bass seems to ruin it but good your experimenting.... altho i dont hear anything "experimental" about it tho.

@macs: I dont like you.....

[Blak]

@Houston Weather - http://soundcloud.com/houstonweather/po ... -stephanie
I really like how this intro builds up, love this pad(?). @0:55 i like how that synth resembles a phone tone of some sort, can't quite put my finger on it, lol. Constantly evolving. Around 2:18 there's a clap that joins the mix, sounds like it's more of the tail of something, though, it feels kinda muddy or granulized to me. Could've done with that in there a bit less or more defined. I always love your stuff.

@antman - http://soundcloud.com/antman2x2/noname/s-6DSyV
All the sounds really gel I fell. Personally I think it needs more, but I don't listen to much p0gman or lifecycle. I think, too, if you took the snares out of the little breaks with just your sample, i.e. around 0:32, it might add a nice dynamic, or a snare when the sample kicks in, then another when it kicks out.

@mthrfnk - http://soundcloud.com/spectrafunk/out-of-time-wip-stuff
Good stuff as usual. @0:45 When that additional synth comes in I felt like the lead synth there should've evolved down an octave then come back up. Also, I would've liked a bit more of a changeup in the breakdown of some sort. A lot of the time it was difficult for me to hear the snare (there is a snare, right?). Everything is cherry here, sounds like all your synths are makin' love and the samples add just the right amount of texture. Last thing ... It seemed like the mid and high synths had reverb, but then would cut off abruptly, can we carry this longer? I think the transitions from sound to sound would definitely improve.

Alright ... so I was pretty much blacked out this weekend and don't honestly remember making most of this, but I threw in an intro quickly this morning. 4th track, here we go ... (does it count as my 4th if I don't remember it?) Hopefully we see some improvements over my last pieces. Again, just up to breakdown.
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[Dustwyrm]

Hey everyone, I posted in the wrong section, so here is my WIP as directed by Wub My track is called "Kill by Dustwyrm" (that's my chosen name

I did read the rules and I will listen and report feedback to tracks when I get home (can't listen at work I just wanted to get ahead of the game and post mine so I can also work on mine when I get home. What I'm finding on my track is that it is muffled overall, especially on the bass. It sounds OK on my car speakers, but others have reported it is in dire need of EQing. I'd really appreciate it others can listen to it on their system and provide some feedback on what needs to be changed/mixed better. I appreciate any help in advance everyone, and like I said I will hold up to my end of the bargain and get others feedback when I get home tonight. -- Thanks

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[Augment]

Dustwyrm: Kick is waay too bassy imo, some of the higher frequencies just heart my ears at times. the flow is nice, but yeah, mixdown needs to be worked on
Blak: Chaotic intro, not sure if I like dig it that much. Snare is nice though. The drop sounds muddy, you may want to "clean up" a bit, scoop out some of the lower mids. Not a fan of the Modern talking patch, though.
Houston weather: Loving the intro pad. Highest sub note is maybe a bit too high? maybe try lowering it an octave. Bell sound could maybe be more in the backround and not so upfront. pretty chilled tune. Not a big fan of the random vocals.
Antman Fuack yes! Loving the drop. Hihat pattern is really cool aswell. I don't know if I have anything constructive to say, really.. Fill out the background is the only thing I can come up with. A dark pad/reverbed hits would be nice.

Alright, so here's a tune I'm working on. It's nearly finished, have some small things I want to change, but I wanted feedback from you guys!
I'm gonna call it Bro Anthem, 'cus it's a laserparty with monsters. lol
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[Dustwyrm]

@blinkesko -- Thank you truly for the advice, I'm gonna work on the kick to make it more clear and less bassy like you said.

Any way you can help me with what specific sounds you are describing by 'high frequencies'? Or do you just mean anything the high in frequency in general.


Thanks

[Augment]

The really high pitched synths. Just take out a bit with an eq or something, and it should be good

[Dustwyrm]

@Blinkesko -- Oh like the little ringing sounds done ever 1/4 or so. I gotcha, thanks man! Appreciate it and will work on that tonight. Thanks again!

[skerrick]

@skerrick: You should know what is good and what is not, listening to random people on the internet could be detrimental to your music. haha.. If its deep then im going to be missing out on alot of stuff on laptop speakers.
:::raw:fourfour:: Kind of interesting beat at the beginning, not too keen on the 0:31 kick roll,, seems to not fit the groove. Not too keen on the drone sounds abit wishy washy (may be the laptop speakers) , do like the twinkly piano pieces. At the dubstep part it feels quite slow (i realise its 110bpm) The snare sounds a bit sharp and could properly do with some reverb to fill out the space (you may be going for a non-reverb snare tho as a reverbed snare is quite a cliche) Not too keen on the bass, think it could do with some interesting movement in it. (altho it may have a really nice low end im missing) . Dont really think the bass meshs with the beats well. got some nice ghosty pads in the background tho. and come 3:07 you have built up some nice ambiance. To me that bass seems to ruin it but good your experimenting.... altho i dont hear anything "experimental" about it tho.

mate if youre gonna bother reviewing someones music do it on a proper system. sorry but macbook pro speakers? im not skrillex, i dont make mid frequency wank. please post a review when youve listened on a sub. i make my bass around 50 to 60hz. youre hearing the crunch i put on the high end with a compressor. because youre using MACBOOK SPEAKERS - while im using krk's. thanks man. lemme know what you think when youve used a sub.

[Kongret]

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