Sucking dick for feedback

unsigned forum members' tracks & place for feedback
Forum rules
By using this "Dubs" sub-forum, you acknowledge that you have read, understood and agreed with our terms of use for this site. Click HERE to read them. If you do not agree to our terms of use, you must exit this site immediately. We do not accept any responsibility for the content, submissions, information or links contained herein. Users posting content here, do so completely at their own risk.

Quick Link to Production Forum
Locked
User avatar
burnz
Posts: 52
Joined: Wed Apr 25, 2012 4:06 am

Sucking dick for feedback

Post by burnz » Fri Nov 23, 2012 12:45 pm

Soundcloud
G'day guys, could I please get some feedback/constructive criticism?
Be as honest as possible, don't worry about my feelings, it's how I learn :)
Last edited by burnz on Sun Nov 25, 2012 3:27 pm, edited 1 time in total.

User avatar
burnz
Posts: 52
Joined: Wed Apr 25, 2012 4:06 am

Re: Burnz-Far Q Mind [Constructive criticism please]

Post by burnz » Sun Nov 25, 2012 3:26 pm

Whos dick do I have to suck around here for someone to tell me how shut my music is?

User avatar
SKIN E
Posts: 678
Joined: Mon Jan 23, 2012 7:33 pm
Location: The United Kingdom
Contact:

Re: Sucking dick for feedback

Post by SKIN E » Sun Nov 25, 2012 3:46 pm

Wub's and EH's would be a good start

on a serious note nice melody, not sure about your kick and snare and the reverb on it.. takes the thump away on both also missed some more perc in general.. the drop is just.. horrendous and I would work on your sound design with your midrange noises but I have to be honest all the other melodies are all top notch.. great notes.. great feel.. good variation you know when to add new elements I have a feeling you got a great amount of music theory behind you? litterally though the melodies from 2:20 + are absolutely amazing.. and that distorted guitar is great too.

I honestly feel like those midrange noises ruined the song and you are made for this melodic stuff! bigup :)

User avatar
burnz
Posts: 52
Joined: Wed Apr 25, 2012 4:06 am

Re: Sucking dick for feedback

Post by burnz » Sun Nov 25, 2012 4:53 pm

Thanks heaps dude! Defiantly the best detailed advice I've ever got. I will work on that. Thanks :)

RIG-RAG
Posts: 81
Joined: Mon Oct 15, 2012 10:06 am

Re: Sucking dick for feedback

Post by RIG-RAG » Sun Nov 25, 2012 10:57 pm

burnz wrote:Soundcloud
G'day guys, could I please get some feedback/constructive criticism?
Be as honest as possible, don't worry about my feelings, it's how I learn :)
we say the same thing to each other all the time around here!

started out good, id take out some low end on the snare and kick for the intro, make it a bit more subtle, so it can then kick the drop like its momma made him to do.
love how the sound at :55 tunes into the melody, greatness.
normally i very much dislike the loud, awesomely obnoxious sound of newer steps, but i love that you kept the song in key.
i feel thats a no go if your making music that is more or less made of sounds scratching the ears at least let it be in key! haha
:i: :i: :i: :i: :i:
but everything feels good.
great job and keep on the beat.
I was permitted to hear an incredible music ... i heard the gestation of the new world... the sound of stars grinding and chafing , of fountains clotted with blazing gems... music is planetary fire, an irreducible which is all sufficient it is the slate-writing of the gods.
- Henry miller , tropic of cancer

User avatar
Electric_Head
Posts: 16958
Joined: Tue May 11, 2010 9:59 am
Location: South of Africa
Contact:

Re: Sucking dick for feedback

Post by Electric_Head » Mon Nov 26, 2012 8:36 am

Intro isn't bad.
Nice filtered drum beat before the drop.
After the drop however the beat is just weak.
Main midrange drop is terrible as skin-e has mentioned, the elements that make-up the drop are useable.
Some interesting synth work later, real tron like 80s sci-fi theme going on.
Those elements would be ideal for a track, excluding all the other nonsense midrange garble.
Understanding I'm very much against the bro-midrange kack.

So many interesting sci fi elements in here.
I would take this track in such a different direction if I was you.
Image ImageImage Image
Image

wub
Posts: 34156
Joined: Tue Feb 26, 2008 3:11 pm
Location: Madrid
Contact:

Re: Sucking dick for feedback

Post by wub » Mon Nov 26, 2012 9:07 am

The beat is getting lost beneath that midrange for a lot of the tune, and what bits I can make out are fairly generic in terms of programming etc. Would suggest the mixdown and composition/arrangement could do with another look.

User avatar
burnz
Posts: 52
Joined: Wed Apr 25, 2012 4:06 am

Re: Sucking dick for feedback

Post by burnz » Mon Nov 26, 2012 9:53 pm

Thanks a lot guys, very helpful feedback. I really appreciate it, thanks :D

andyyhitscar
Posts: 566
Joined: Fri Jun 03, 2011 8:52 pm
Location: New York
Contact:

Re: Sucking dick for feedback

Post by andyyhitscar » Thu Nov 29, 2012 9:53 pm

get rid of those bells in the beginning. Synth after that is nice. Bass locks nice before the build-up. Find a way for the drums to come out more at the drop. Keep your ideas simple and one at a time. Your sections change too much and there is no song as a whole but rather sick riffs that sound okay together

User avatar
burnz
Posts: 52
Joined: Wed Apr 25, 2012 4:06 am

Re: Sucking dick for feedback

Post by burnz » Fri Nov 30, 2012 9:30 am

Thanks man, still trying to understand equalizing and compression. I know what you mean about the "no whole song" It was just reflecting my state of mind. I'll work on my progression and flow a bit more. Thanks a lot mate.

andyyhitscar
Posts: 566
Joined: Fri Jun 03, 2011 8:52 pm
Location: New York
Contact:

Re: Sucking dick for feedback

Post by andyyhitscar » Thu Dec 06, 2012 5:52 am

its all in the ear man when it comes to equalizing man. A wise man once told me that if you are able to listen to a song and, with your ear, be able to individually pick out each sound in the mix and hear it clearly.

Compression, I like multi-band compressors. Look for it, whatever program your using most definitely has one

VIVA ZARGON!

AMG
Posts: 107
Joined: Wed Apr 25, 2012 3:39 am
Location: Minneapolis, MN

Re: Sucking dick for feedback

Post by AMG » Fri Dec 07, 2012 3:37 pm

The subject line made me cringe, so I'll pass on the head (I know you're kidding), but I don't have the insight to tell you in detail like these guys. Especially since I don't produce, just rap. With that said, I'll tell you what I like about the track. While some feel it's missing wubs there is a solid mix of depth and how the sounds are incorporated into this track. I couldn't tell you how make your snares sound more improved etc. but the vision you have with this track seems clear enough that you didn't just throw stuff into it while composing. I like that. So in a nut shell, you have tons of potential to make this a really solid track. Maybe the sound quality could be a bit bolder and less muddy, maybe more mixing? I don't know. Thanks for sharing, I enjoyed listening. And please, no more asking to service ppl for listens ha.

User avatar
burnz
Posts: 52
Joined: Wed Apr 25, 2012 4:06 am

Re: Sucking dick for feedback

Post by burnz » Sun Dec 09, 2012 7:09 am

andyyhitscar wrote:its all in the ear man when it comes to equalizing man. A wise man once told me that if you are able to listen to a song and, with your ear, be able to individually pick out each sound in the mix and hear it clearly.

Compression, I like multi-band compressors. Look for it, whatever program your using most definitely has one

VIVA ZARGON!
I'm still learning when to cut and boost instrument frequencies, I have industrial deafness from work, which makes it a lot harder with certain frequencies :i:
My DAW does have a Mulitband compressor, It's also on my list of "production technique's how to" I haven't used it much besides on bass tracks. Thanks for the feedback too mate :)

User avatar
burnz
Posts: 52
Joined: Wed Apr 25, 2012 4:06 am

Re: Sucking dick for feedback

Post by burnz » Sun Dec 09, 2012 7:12 am

AMG wrote:The subject line made me cringe, so I'll pass on the head (I know you're kidding), but I don't have the insight to tell you in detail like these guys. Especially since I don't produce, just rap. With that said, I'll tell you what I like about the track. While some feel it's missing wubs there is a solid mix of depth and how the sounds are incorporated into this track. I couldn't tell you how make your snares sound more improved etc. but the vision you have with this track seems clear enough that you didn't just throw stuff into it while composing. I like that. So in a nut shell, you have tons of potential to make this a really solid track. Maybe the sound quality could be a bit bolder and less muddy, maybe more mixing? I don't know. Thanks for sharing, I enjoyed listening. And please, no more asking to service ppl for listens ha.

Haha sorry mate, sometimes it's really hard to get feedback. The subject line defiantly worked :h: have had more feedback on this post, than all of my other posts combined :corndance: Thanks also for the feedback mate, you are right about my mixing, it's defiantly in need of refining. :Q:

Locked

Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users and 0 guests