Hypno - Blackjack (my 1st tune)

[hypno]

as the title says, this is the first song i've ever made. Its still a bit rough around the edges but i wanted to get some feedback before i finalize the track:

http://www.divshare.com/download/4323130-064

Let me know what you guys think of it.

by the way, if anyone can think of a better title for this tune let me know, i only named it blackjack cos i had the dvd of 21 on my desk at the time

- Hypno

[darkmatteruk]

track wasnt there m8, you remove it?

[hypno]

no i didnt . Nevermind, i've just uploaded it to youtube. Here is the link...

Hypno - Blackjack

- Hypno

[kindofblue272]

I like the mixdown and your sounds are big. I think this track has a lot of potential. The arrangement seems a little erratic in that the chord changes didn't really make sense to me--I don't like the way it sounds when the bassline modulates to major, also there should be a break or breakdown somewhere. Maybe an idea would be to cut out the chord changes altogether or modulate stepwise for one measure at the end of a 16-bar phrase. Work on adding some more fills to kind of roll the song along more-- have the bassline drop out at the end of some of the phrases. The scratching seemed very basic and there should be less of it --maybe just keep a couple of the better fills.