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Post by JLproductions » Mon May 02, 2011 12:01 pm

@Craggle - amazing track, very jokeresque i like it...only thing id say layer the snare more make it punch more, that would make the track roll better!

@buddstep - this song is nasty, however i cant really here much low end to the main gritty bass

@Lightshapers - Wicked vibezz, only thing id say the hi hats sound a bit bunched, id get them a bit more consistent maybe some quieter some louder to make the song bounce more!

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Post by Elliottm » Mon May 02, 2011 12:59 pm

Hey guys,

First of all, loving all the tunes on here, always interested in undiscovered talent :)

@amphibian - that bass on "Serenity" is a top notch sub, love it, the ambience of the track is nice aswell, maybe a nice chord-type pad over the first drop? just an idea but otherwise properly nice track :)

@JLproductions - mate, loving the vibe of "bandwith", proper original style to it, hard to find something wrong with it, unless i could be stupidly anal and say the open hi hat is a bit too bright, but seriously loving this track, nicely

@EDN - "dedicated" is a banger mate, reminds a bit of bonobo :) for me, the clarity seems alrite, but i over do clarity on some of my tunes, ive been told, but other than that, properly nice, loving the strings aswell

Heres my latest dubstep tune "Drifting", its more of a kinda summery tune, bit more lively than usual:
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Also got a 90's influenced track you guys could check out, would love some feeback on these:

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Post by amphibian » Mon May 02, 2011 1:05 pm

eliottm - wrong tune :P try this:

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As for your track...

it's lackinga lot of low-end, but otherwise I feel the whole tune is really, really nice. Love the upbeat, happy feeling. Beautiful work on the vocals as well! I feel the Intro I needs some work but what... I couldn't tell you. tbh I love your style - where you from?
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Post by amphibian » Mon May 02, 2011 1:22 pm

Finished, from the feedback here on this thread. Replaced the snare, beefed up the kick, eq'd most elements, more variation pre-breakdowns and post-drops.etc. Off to the engineers :D also added in some rolling rides at certain points in the track. Enjoy!

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Post by JLproductions » Mon May 02, 2011 1:25 pm

@Elliottm - Thanks for the feedback on Bandwidth :4: I really love the drums in 'drifting' they are so bouncy and energetic, nice work, cant fault anything in that one its genius! Maybe its just my speakers, but the drums sound a little quiet in 'Spring' compared to the bass...


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Post by wizeguy » Mon May 02, 2011 3:00 pm

@zerbaman: help me name this tune, instantly favorited that shit. proper vibes on that

@orps: very nice also. only thing i would of like to hear is them hats at 20 second to come back in later at somepoint

@JLproductions-dissorganized: weighty all i can say....

@amphibian: nothing bad to say either. sounding crisp

just wanted to let you guys know i'm feelin it! big ups and keep it up!

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Post by Elliottm » Mon May 02, 2011 5:16 pm

amphibian wrote:eliottm - wrong tune :P try this:

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As for your track...

it's lackinga lot of low-end, but otherwise I feel the whole tune is really, really nice. Love the upbeat, happy feeling. Beautiful work on the vocals as well! I feel the Intro I needs some work but what... I couldn't tell you. tbh I love your style - where you from?
haha my bad, thats a proper nice tune aswell, nicely done mate! yeh i was going back and forth with bass , i'll try and sort it out :) and regarding the intro, i was thinking it mite be a bit bare so i'll see what i can do :) cheers for the feedback, im from london studying in leeds atm, what bout you?

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Post by Elliottm » Mon May 02, 2011 5:18 pm

JLproductions wrote:@Elliottm - Thanks for the feedback on Bandwidth :4: I really love the drums in 'drifting' they are so bouncy and energetic, nice work, cant fault anything in that one its genius! Maybe its just my speakers, but the drums sound a little quiet in 'Spring' compared to the bass...


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cheers for the feedback, glad you like it :) i'll try it on a bunch of speakers and see what its like on them , i think the bass is quite loud tho

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Post by NRHc » Mon May 02, 2011 10:08 pm

@Jlproductions
1.Bandwidth
Really like the vibes on that one,I really feel like it's top notch mate
2.Freq of nature
You really got a great idea there,only thing is I feel like it's lacking some subbass under that wobble,but other than that great work

@Elliotm
that drifting song is awesome,really liking the summer vibes,would love a 320!

@amphibian
as always your track is top notch nothing to say about it

Here's my latest one,would love feedback on it and also on the other track on my sig if anybody feels it!! thanks guys
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Post by JLproductions » Mon May 02, 2011 10:43 pm

@ NRHc - the first track im reaally feelin i love the deeper side of dubstep! the sub bass is perfect, only thing id say turn up the snare, or layer it up so it gets more of a kick. second track is sick aswell nice subs again, wack some reverb on the snares make it roll more into each change, and yeah getting compared to DMZ is M.A.S.S.I.V.E!



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Post by amphibian » Mon May 02, 2011 11:10 pm

@NHRC - duuuuuude. Deep is best! :D only two things - snare, needs more weight. Seems very light and just disappears with that heavy bass (Good trick is to use the same kick, but eq out the bottom, so you only get the top-end of the kick), and on that note - the midrange part of the bass needs to be turned down ever so slightly. Love the intro, and the bell-like synth you got going. Beautiful sub action. My kind of producer. +1 follow :) I haven't heard this on my system at home, but something tells me the sub is a tad too loud - because it powers through on crappy headphones ;)
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Post by reverend » Mon May 02, 2011 11:29 pm

@jlprod -'through the portal'- Really liking the bass sound and the FX in this one. Percs are sounding a tad hot to me and maybe you could switch up the beat on the second drop?

@NHRc - Big track. Again, the bass sound is top notch like. I was thinking the snare sounded a bit weak in the first half of the first verse but in the second section it works great.

@ Elliottm - 'Spring' - Feeling the 90's vibes, big summery/hands-in-the-air bizniz. Mix is sounding solid, everythings got its place, nice work!

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Post by NRHc » Mon May 02, 2011 11:57 pm

amphibian wrote:@NHRC - duuuuuude. Deep is best! :D only two things - snare, needs more weight. Seems very light and just disappears with that heavy bass (Good trick is to use the same kick, but eq out the bottom, so you only get the top-end of the kick), and on that note - the midrange part of the bass needs to be turned down ever so slightly. Love the intro, and the bell-like synth you got going. Beautiful sub action. My kind of producer. +1 follow :) I haven't heard this on my system at home, but something tells me the sub is a tad too loud - because it powers through on crappy headphones ;)
JLproductions wrote:@ NRHc - the first track im reaally feelin i love the deeper side of dubstep! the sub bass is perfect, only thing id say turn up the snare, or layer it up so it gets more of a kick. second track is sick aswell nice subs again, wack some reverb on the snares make it roll more into each change, and yeah getting compared to DMZ is M.A.S.S.I.V.E!
Thanks guys!! Will keep working on the mix and keep you posted!

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love the crackles and the feel of this one,bouncy sub bass is really winner on that one,great job
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Post by Specimen-Yarp » Tue May 03, 2011 1:46 am

@Reverend
the crackles are dopeeeee
not much to criticize its sickkkkkkk!!!!!!

I could REALLLLLY use some feedback on this one , i think you will all like it.. i hope.
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Post by alexvont12 » Tue May 03, 2011 1:47 am

NRHc - Suuuubb... I love it. The melody fits nicely.. esp. at 2.45... Sounds great mate :D Only thing I could say is maybe put more breaks in the sub, starts to get a bit too much near the end... but its up to taste/speaker config.

Reverend - I'm really feelin' the beat and percussion.. Sub is nice, I'm excited to see where it goes from there :4:

JLProductions - The hats seem a bit loud compared to the snare, but they could mean to be that way. Also the stabs are a bit loud... The bass is siiick :W: Sorry just read the Soundcloud comments... :| I love how the whole song build-ups up to the end. Overall the track could use some more mids, but I'm not sure what...
Wizeguy - Feelin the groove man :corndance: Love those subtle wobbles, they fit very nicely. The main synth could use a some more wet reverb... Interested to see where it goes.. :W:

amphibian - Epic creepy samples :lol: Great atmosphere, perfect synth/reverb... Pretty much amazing :4:

vv Just about finished with this ambient/downtempo 120 BPM... I was wondering how the mix sounds to you guys?
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Post by amphibian » Tue May 03, 2011 2:08 am

@specimen - correct me if I'm wrong here mate - but you need to post 3 bits of feedback before you post a new wip. Rules are at the start of the thread.
@alexvont - not a fan of reverb'd kicks, I feel it just dirties up the percussion. I also think the kick doesn't really fit the tune. I think something deeper, with less top-end would be a better sample choice. I really like the pads, and the bass that comes in around 1.40 is awesome. Maybe a tad too much reverb though. hehe. Click sample is nice :)
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Post by Specimen-Yarp » Tue May 03, 2011 2:17 am

@jlprod -'through the portal'- the fx were dopee , and the bass was really mood setting for me.
@ Elliottm - 'Spring' - to me, it was mellow, i felt some old school in it.
@NHRc - Big track. yeah the snare was pree week, but im feeling the rest of the track man!!! sick work

this is the wip i have for you all to give me feedback on, this one is funnnnnn. and i can only immagine what im gonna do with it from here.
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Post by amphibian » Tue May 03, 2011 2:28 am

@specimen - all good, thanks :) another dubstep remix of the obama speec already. hahahaha. Intro snare has too much reverb imo. Love the arpeggiated synth though. Drop is very dirty (in a bad way) too much reverb all over the place. Bass/synth could use a little more thickness.
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Post by Specimen-Yarp » Tue May 03, 2011 2:36 am

amphibian wrote:@specimen - all good, thanks :) another dubstep remix of the obama speec already. hahahaha. Intro snare has too much reverb imo. Love the arpeggiated synth though. Drop is very dirty (in a bad way) too much reverb all over the place. Bass/synth could use a little more thickness.
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Post by alexvont12 » Tue May 03, 2011 2:48 am

amphibian wrote:@alexvont - not a fan of reverb'd kicks, I feel it just dirties up the percussion. I also think the kick doesn't really fit the tune. I think something deeper, with less top-end would be a better sample choice. I really like the pads, and the bass that comes in around 1.40 is awesome. Maybe a tad too much reverb though. hehe. Click sample is nice :)
Thanks man, I took your advice, tweaked a few eq's, and updated.. Sounds better now :mrgreen: :W:

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