[feedback] neutron generator

[MultipleOrganizmz]

I need feedback on this track. Please be as critical as possible. I need you to put me in my place (constructively).
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[general knowledge]

There're some nice melodic elements in there. Try layering a few different samples to build snares/kicks. The reverb/delay combo in the breakdown sounds a bit cheap - not really your fault, just try getting hold of a nicer reverb. A little distortion on drums/synths goes a long way. Good sense of depth in the track though, I like it! Maybe roll the bottom of some of the non-bass elements (cut low mids on reverbs etc.)

[3za]

What was your aim for this track?

Because I can't really tell atm, it just seems like lots of ideas put together, with no really direction. Think you need to think what you want from this track, and then go about refining it.

[MultipleOrganizmz]

Thanks!

[Zeta-Sagittarii]

I do not think there is too much wrong with it. SOunds pretty decent. Keep up the goodwork. Note that, the orginality factor is missing. But you'll find something that shapes your style if you haven't already.

[noizy parka]

Not a bad track at all man, like the way you have tied things together, i'd personally filter the wobble a little lower but thats just my taste

[hasezwei]

now i like the melody A LOT, just the way you conclude isn't really my thing. ending it like that would work in rock music i suppose, but it sounds odd here... the wobble is cool, i'd rethink the changes of lfo-rate a bit though, at the moment it sounds a little random which kills the vibe for me a bit. i like how dreamy the tune is, especially with those echoed high synths giving it a kinda crystaline feel. the second wobble (the vocal YOY thingie) is too loud in comparsion with the rest too, but otherwise benefits the track IMO.
in the second buildup you suddenly introduce a melody that didn't really belong there IMO, just leave that out. let the echo-y high-pitched things go on a bit, and the beat. maybe bring the one you already have there in subtly with filters and other fx. the rising synth is very cool again, but it shouldn't end so apruptly. let it rise longer (or beginn earlier) and somehow add highend towards the end (send reverb?) and let said highend fade out into the drop. kinda like a house buildup, those have lots of white noise used to great effect.

the drums themselves are okay-ish, but not really creme de la creme. either the kick or clap has some noise after it (heard best just before the song ends) and they don't punch through the mix. they're ok in the intro and buildup, but for the actual drop/main passages you should make both kick and snare a bit snappier, give them some 'click' and punch to really get people moving.

hope i could help! if you feel like you need mixdown advice, read the moneyshot thread, an enlightening lengthy read for young and old!

i'm tired from work so there's not many smileyfaces in this post, have some to compensate:

you'll get this finished! i'm sure

[MultipleOrganizmz]

Thank you all so much for all the feedback. This is the third song I've put considerable time into (over 3 hours), and I feel like my sound develops more and more every time.