mp3 download a tune i made this morning - criticisms welcome

[davwuh]

aight, this is a tune i made this morning called 'rain' - its that style you frequently see on Tempa - the simple melodies which build up to the heavy bass drop, obligatory weird sample (i chose a wicked line from Taxi Driver, it sounds dope imo)

anyway, criticisms are welcome, tell me where ive gone right and wrong as far as makin a killer riddim goes

thanks
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http://www.zshare.net/download/davwuh-rain-mp3.html

[davwuh]

come on guys, you can do it

[davwuh]

be a sport

[bannerworx media]

Gonna download this when my others are done and give you feed back

[bannerworx media]

It's got potential, think a good mix down of the sounds, and a bit more filtering and effects, with a switch in certain places this would be all good. But that's my opinion

[rekordah]

really nice beat! two things tho, turn down the bass! i kno this is dubstep but i reckon it would b nice as a more ambient sounding tune. and second ting, the synth sounds that comes in first at about a min is really in your face and cud do with sum tinkering........but other than that it is a banga!