Here i am(140bpm breaks type tune)

lloydy · Post by **lloydy** » Sun Jun 10, 2012 4:30 pm

New tune,started of as an experimental hiphop type tune and ended up as a fuck knows.Got a breaks sound to it at 140bpm.
Feedback welcome and thanks for listening.
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kaiori breathe · Post by **kaiori breathe** » Sun Jun 10, 2012 7:22 pm

Intro ambiance is nice, drop hits pretty nicely, and that melody on the top is quite eerie in a good way. I would maybe add a little reverb to those congo hits before the drop, they're a good addition but I think they sound a bit out of place while they're so clean and the rest of the intro is so airy and spacey.

Maybe it's just me, but I think the sub sounds a little loud at times by comparison to the drums, I think it sounds like you've chopped up a drum sample but just kinda left it at that? I would maybe layer in a snare with some more punch.

Sorry if it sounds like I'm properly laying into you here lol, it's a good track, with good direction I think, like the overall feel and the nostalgic 90s dnb vibe I get off it. Vocals are nicely worked too and I don't honestly think anybody other than me would nit pick it so heavily haha.

Nice work overall man.

lloydy · Post by **lloydy** » Sun Jun 10, 2012 7:32 pm

kaiori breathe wrote:Intro ambiance is nice, drop hits pretty nicely, and that melody on the top is quite eerie in a good way. I would maybe add a little reverb to those congo hits before the drop, they're a good addition but I think they sound a bit out of place while they're so clean and the rest of the intro is so airy and spacey.

Maybe it's just me, but I think the sub sounds a little loud at times by comparison to the drums, I think it sounds like you've chopped up a drum sample but just kinda left it at that? I would maybe layer in a snare with some more punch.

Sorry if it sounds like I'm properly laying into you here lol, it's a good track, with good direction I think, like the overall feel and the nostalgic 90s dnb vibe I get off it. Vocals are nicely worked too and I don't honestly think anybody other than me would nit pick it so heavily haha.

Nice work overall man.

Its all good brother,i hear you on the percussion in the begging,i just used some stereo panning effects didn't really think of them being to clean but yeah i will go back and check that out.
I did mix this on my monitors and checked the overall mix with a spectrum analyzer and the sub did sit nice against the rest of the mix but there was room to bring it down a db or 2.
I did just chop breaks up and layer then,i think in total there is about 9 breaks in there with different parts,i did think about adding a snare but didn't want to take away from that breaky feel if you know what i mean.
I have taken much worse crit than this before and they are all elements i probably looked at when making it so no harm done lol
The 90's vibe is what i was going for really as the 90's is pretty much the era that i grew up in so cheers mate that made me quite chuffed.
Cheers for the feedback

lloydy · Post by **lloydy** » Mon Jun 11, 2012 5:20 pm

lloydy · Post by **lloydy** » Tue Jun 12, 2012 6:15 pm

Last bump,come on guys some feedback please???

SKIN E · Post by **SKIN E** » Wed Jun 13, 2012 10:10 am

Liking the intro, a bit trippy with that tremolo like effect on the synth, vocals fit decently, oh nice when the bass & beat drops it has a complete different feel for me, a really raw feel, think it sounds good! Really liking those bleeps at around 2:10.

You seem to be trying to introduce a new break at 3:00? Not really sure if it fits in for me. The arps after the drop are quite nice though

, I would of had the sub off in the break, so the second drop/after the breakdown has that tiny little extra - just a little tip from myself in an early morning

lloydy · Post by **lloydy** » Wed Jun 13, 2012 3:34 pm

Nice one mate i will return the gesture.
I agree with most of your points,i wasn't to sure if i liked the sub on the break but the track just sounded a bit flat without it.
I will have to listen for the break at 3:00 to see what you mean,the reason i introduced so many beats is because i really wanted the drums to chop and change the track rather than being repetitive.
Again cheers for the feedback mate it is really appreciated.

Electric_Head · Post by **Electric_Head** » Wed Jun 13, 2012 3:45 pm

I quite like the raw feel you have going.
The tremolo effect sounds a bit high pitched to me.
Loads of good elements.
The break I would maybe drop the shakers and the backing pads and change it up a bit.
It does get repetitive without the drum change.
As kaiori said, a bit more accentuation on certain hits.
Beef up some samples by layering.
One or 2 pads are also a bit thin, don't be afraid of thining out other elements and bringing in a big airy pad.

Great track.

lloydy · Post by **lloydy** » Wed Jun 13, 2012 3:48 pm

Thankyou very much Electric.

lloydy · Post by **lloydy** » Thu Jun 14, 2012 7:02 pm

bump,some more please!!

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