unknown86 wrote:Hey i just started this track yesterday its not finished but i think its ok for my first track wanted to get some feedback though thanks.
Unlike
some of the biters in this forum, I tend not to jump on the "attack the n00b" bandwagon unless I see a good enough reason to. You broke a forum rule. Shit happens - and the folks who have nothing better to do with their time than bitch about the natural progression of shit happening have issues of their own to sort out.
I gave your work-in-progress a listen. For a
first attempt, I'll say that it 's a lot better than
my first try at Dub was. That's probably not saying much, and I don't represent myself as a Dubstep prodigy by any means.
That said: Your intro sounds "empty", as does your breakdown. I'd venture to say that has something to do with the use of the single, "flat" instrument that doesn't do much beyond repeat the same five notes over & over, with nothing to "spice it up". It fails to give the track any "character". Your bass is interesting; electro-ish, but with the potential to have some real grime in there.
Your sound effects - reverse cymbals and such, as well as your snare - need some effects tossed on 'em: reverb and maybe some delay. Without it, there's no "depth" or "space" to the track, and your buildups end awkwardly and abruptly. Everything - and I mean
everything - in the track needs to be equalized. There's something about the kick that just rubs me the wrong way, and that snare sounds flat.
Also, after the breakdown, try to change things up a bit. I don't hear or otherwise sense any real change or evolution at any point in listening - just the same droning bassline, interrupted briefly by an awkward breakdown, and then returning to the same.
I
did like that little drum-fill you threw in there. It took me a long time to figure out fills and drum breaks.
If I were to line it up with the production efforts of seasoned Dubstep artists, I would have to give this a 2/10. Considering, however, that you're new to writing music, and this is your first track
ever (if I understood you correctly), I'll give you a 5- or 6/10, for the things you got right, plus the effort.
You have a LOT more learning to do, a lot more practice, research, and work ahead of you. Trial-and-error is going to be your best teacher, and I hope you take this critique/advice in the spirit it was intended.
Also, the guys who reamed your ass for not reading the rules of the forum
were right in doing so (even if they do get a little excessive, and take some shit too seriously at times). Next time, be sure you
read the rules of the forum you're posting in. They're there for a reason; and if you're not going to adhere to the standards or rules of the forum, you can't reasonably expect anyone to do you any favors.
