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The Iron Giant [DUBSTEP]

Posted: Sat Mar 05, 2011 10:15 pm
by antman
I need some feedback on this track I just finished. If theres any adjustments you think I should make let me know!!!!

Thanks dudes.


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-Antman

Re: The Iron Giant [DUBSTEP]

Posted: Sun Mar 06, 2011 12:35 am
by CoreyGoesRawr
AAAAAANNNNTTTMMAAAANNNNN!!
glad to see you got another track in the works.

one thing I noticed (which I'm extremely guilty of in my tracks) is the drums are lacking energy. Which can make the track seem to drag at points. Now I'm not saying make it a dance tune but at the end of your tune you added a hi hat pattern try experimenting with something like that earlier in the track, It just might help it feel more intense.

Re: The Iron Giant [DUBSTEP]

Posted: Sun Mar 06, 2011 12:59 am
by antman
Yay! Hi Corey!

Im gonna experiment with some drums I guess. Ive gotten alot better though.

Re: The Iron Giant [DUBSTEP]

Posted: Sun Mar 06, 2011 3:31 am
by CoreyGoesRawr
oh btw I'm a retard. you did exactly what I suggested and I missed it lol

Re: The Iron Giant [DUBSTEP]

Posted: Sun Mar 06, 2011 4:22 am
by antman
Really? Haha I figured you mean the drums in the beginning without the hats AH W/E. Thanks for the feedback though man!

Re: The Iron Giant [DUBSTEP]

Posted: Sun Mar 06, 2011 4:32 pm
by Lista
I wanna have your babies after listening to this. I have to go change my pants now. K thanx bai

Re: The Iron Giant [DUBSTEP]

Posted: Sun Mar 06, 2011 9:25 pm
by antman
Lista wrote:I wanna have your babies after listening to this. I have to go change my pants now. K thanx bai
Creepy..

Re: The Iron Giant [DUBSTEP]

Posted: Sun Mar 06, 2011 11:56 pm
by Cubicle
Lista wrote:I wanna have your babies after listening to this. I have to go change my pants now. K thanx bai
What a coincidence, only 1 post and that here, on the Dubs & WIPs for Feedback thread on a random track.

Antman, that you?

anyway, don't really know where to comment on.
Track is so full of well "yeyeyeye" and i'm not a huge fan of all these formant filters.
Also your song structure seems odd, can't really place my finger on where the chorus kicks in or where the second drop is.
Those drums could indeed use some love, layer that snare, increase the kick level? I don't know, fuck around with it.

Don't let this discourage you tho, feedback ain't always positive.

Re: The Iron Giant [DUBSTEP]

Posted: Mon Mar 07, 2011 12:03 am
by Lista
actually im his friend and he just helped me sign up for the forum and told me to go listen to his track and i did and that was my reaction. K thanx bai.

Re: The Iron Giant [DUBSTEP]

Posted: Mon Mar 07, 2011 12:04 am
by Cubicle
Lista wrote:actually im his friend and he just helped me sign up for the forum and told me to go listen to his track and i did and that was my reaction. K thanx bai.
It was either that, or it was himself. Just seems quite suspicious, but hey who cares anyway.

Re: The Iron Giant [DUBSTEP]

Posted: Mon Mar 07, 2011 12:05 am
by antman
Cubicle wrote:
Lista wrote:I wanna have your babies after listening to this. I have to go change my pants now. K thanx bai
What a coincidence, only 1 post and that here, on the Dubs & WIPs for Feedback thread on a random track.

Antman, that you?

anyway, don't really know where to comment on.
Track is so full of well "yeyeyeye" and i'm not a huge fan of all these formant filters.
Also your song structure seems odd, can't really place my finger on where the chorus kicks in or where the second drop is.
Those drums could indeed use some love, layer that snare, increase the kick level? I don't know, fuck around with it.

Don't let this discourage you tho, feedback ain't always positive.
No, hes one of my friends that thought it would be funny to sign up and comment on the thread as he was with me when I posted it haha.

Thanks for the feedback though, negative feedback is probably the most useful.

The chorus kicks in after the second set of "Foot steps"(the same sound in the beginning of the song just slower)

Re: The Iron Giant [DUBSTEP]

Posted: Mon Mar 07, 2011 12:06 am
by eldoogle
A) You need to work on your arrangement to make it memorable and easy to follow.

B) Energy needs to build.

C) Needs subbass

D) Do more reading

Don't worry (you probably aren't but I should say so anyways). For your third song this is good like you said, you've probably gotten better.

Re: The Iron Giant [DUBSTEP]

Posted: Mon Mar 07, 2011 12:09 am
by Lista
kay

Re: The Iron Giant [DUBSTEP]

Posted: Mon Mar 07, 2011 12:13 am
by antman
eldoogle wrote:A) You need to work on your arrangement to make it memorable and easy to follow.

B) Energy needs to build.

C) Needs subbass

D) Do more reading

Don't worry (you probably aren't but I should say so anyways). For your third song this is good like you said, you've probably gotten better.
Thanks alot for the feedback man.

What parts of the song seem "un-arranged"? If you could just lemme know and when I edit the song using all the feedback I can switch some parts around?

Re: The Iron Giant [DUBSTEP]

Posted: Mon Mar 07, 2011 12:30 am
by eldoogle
There are many ways to build a song. You can go on Wikipedia and read about rock song structure where it leads in, verse, chorus, bridge, chorusX2 or something like that. Well with dubstep theres no real structure (this could be argued, maybe it does) but if you listen to brostep you'll hear it has a build where tension builds like crazy and then it drops HARD. Then second buildup and WHAM harder than first drop. So your song is kinda all over the board.

Re: The Iron Giant [DUBSTEP]

Posted: Mon Mar 07, 2011 12:34 am
by eldoogle
Maybe at 21 seconds in add some high hats, model your songs structure on other songs. You can imitate soundwise too, but what I'm saying is structure only.

Re: The Iron Giant [DUBSTEP]

Posted: Mon Mar 07, 2011 12:35 am
by antman
Thanks alot eldoogle. Much appreciated man! :D

Re: The Iron Giant [DUBSTEP]

Posted: Mon Mar 07, 2011 12:38 am
by eldoogle
Your welcome.

Re: The Iron Giant [DUBSTEP]

Posted: Mon Mar 07, 2011 5:33 am
by makemerich
fuckin weird. this belongs in a remake of a 1950s horror film. :twisted:

Re: The Iron Giant [DUBSTEP]

Posted: Mon Mar 07, 2011 6:08 am
by antman
makemerich wrote:fuckin weird. this belongs in a remake of a 1950s horror film. :twisted:
Is that a good thing?