hey,
the track is a bit short
the compositions sounds good to me .. means the elements and structure you used.
but you should improve the overall sound...
some suggestions:
the bassline needs more punch i think...
it just seems to have not enough subs (it has in fact),
but just a little bit of eq-ing on the bassline (lower some mid frequencies)
the snare could be more crispy.. (try to layer a 2nd snare)
or just try some alternative snares(of that kind)
too much middle frequencies in generell. (in my ears)
maybe a look in a frequency analyzer would help ...
and listen to the track on different speakers/systems..
some (very) small , some big, some bad , some good, in the car, ...
that helps a lot
but.. you re not far away from sending away a good-soundin track !!
